Yuske
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Post by Yuske on Oct 3, 2006 23:29:34 GMT -5
Name: Yuske
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Bender: Earth
Weapons: Bending
Nation: Earth Kingdom
Personality: easily aggitated, snoby, conceded
Appearence: 6 ft. tall, 150 lbs, wears an Earth Army Suit.
History: When Yuske was 12 years old and had nearly mastered earth bending, he was sent away to a fairy transportation group taking refugees to Ba Sing Se ,fearing the Fire Nation would find him.
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Post by Azrael on Oct 4, 2006 15:36:46 GMT -5
im going to need a little more detail before we can approve this.
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Post by Indra on Oct 4, 2006 17:31:09 GMT -5
Gonna need some work. Try helping me with some questions.
1. Why would the Fire Lord dump him in the earth kingdom capital when he was only a child? Children are a little more impresionable, and would not be the best bet for a hidden spy. And how could he spy on anyone of any importance? Last time I checked, no children worked at the Pentagon.
2. If he was in the Earth Kingdom for most of his life, How could he learn Fire Bending? Who would teach him in Ba Sing Se?
3. How could the fire nation put someone over the walls? And why didn't they do something more practical like put massive amounts of troops over?
4. Personality: Okay, he is a good person, what makes him a bad person? Why wouldn't I like him If I were to meet him.
5. Appearance: You just described Zuko with out a scar. What about hair and eyes? And anyone who has seen a 6' tall person (unless they are Yoa Ming) knows they are tall, so that part is a little redundant. Does he have any distingusing features (i.e. a scar around his left eye? please don't use that)?
Please know that I am not attacking your character, only trying to help him be a better person. I'd like to know a little more.
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Yuske
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Post by Yuske on Oct 4, 2006 20:11:51 GMT -5
OK i like people helping where they can to help profect something that rough around the edge's.
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Post by Indra on Oct 4, 2006 20:30:41 GMT -5
That's great that you do like that, but you haven't answered my questions. Please do so.
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Post by Azrael on Oct 11, 2006 15:29:06 GMT -5
ok, i would approve this but in our upcoming plotline there aren't going to be any cannon characters so i would probably take out the thing about bumi
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Yuske
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Post by Yuske on Oct 11, 2006 15:34:33 GMT -5
ok
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